Shockingly competent for a first submission to the portal. I'm positively surprised.
I have some minor suggestions concerning the presentation, though:
- Your thumbnail is pretty much a black rectangle right now. Some users will vote it zero just for that.
- Newgrounds has its own age filters (which you already use). There is no need to point out that the movie is meant "for teens" in the description.
- Similar things are true for blood. Since your use of blood is pretty tame I'd either scratch that or move it to the end of the list. The warning for flashing lights is way more important.
- One of your tags reads "viloence". Not exactly a dramatic mistake, but I thought I should bring it up while I'm at it. ;)
- As with the other stuff concerning the age rating, I'd drop the "teen"-tag - unless the combatants are teenagers.
- I'm not a specialist when it comes to tags on NG, and it's all anarchy anyway, but "first-animation" has a good chance to come up when other animators search for the work of their peers for reference.
And two more general suggestions:
- Please don't "react" to your own stuff. I know the 'option' isn't disabled, but it's not a good look (for reasons that will sound pretty insulting if I were to lay them out for you).
- You don't have to make every text bigger and bold. Users with eye problems can just zoom in. Making the letters so large has a certain... "crayon-quality", if you know what I mean... ;)
Best of luck for the future.
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